You did well is you have cool header, great story, cool picture. But you didn't show the reader what the price is and the date is show twice times( Thursday 3, November 2011 and then 3/11/2011) The end need to improve because it missing some part, I look in the Wikipedia and I think you miss European Champion Clubs' Cup campaigns, that mean your newspaper didn't show the reader all of the words you want to say.
You did well is you have cool header, great story, cool picture. But you didn't show the reader what the price is and the date is show twice times( Thursday 3, November 2011 and then 3/11/2011) The end need to improve because it missing some part, I look in the Wikipedia and I think you miss European Champion Clubs' Cup campaigns, that mean your newspaper didn't show the reader all of the words you want to say.
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